Droppy Comic

Oh! No definitely not I just couldn't see it, I think your stuff is great OK, it's there now, looks great too XD

What's happening in the last row of panels?

Yea, I honestly have no idea what is happening.

OK cool I'll tell you what is going on and then I'll need your advice to make it more obvious.

So in the first frame he is sweating from the sun's heat. In the next frame, he sees what he thinks is the mystic who sent him on the adventure in the first place.

But in the next frame, to his surprise, it's just a mirage. And a cactus.

He keeps on moving, but decides to just lie down in the hot desert sun.

It should be more obvious Droppy is in a desert and may see mirages. Transparency alone isn't enough to make the mirage look one. Add the effect air makes when it's over a hot surface.

What confused me the most was the transition between the last two panels. It looks like Droppy was knocked down for no reason.

Try using different perspectives to convey you ideas.

Here are the updated comics, with narration:

Very nice! Your development has greatly improved the comics, well done

Great Droppy comic Make more...

Great Droppy comic Make more...

BOOM

Ethan, maybe we could make it into game, using comics as cutscenes? I can help with coding.

Ethan, maybe we could make it into game, using comics as cutscenes? I can help with coding.

http://community.stencyl.com/index.php/topic,4234.0.html

I like it! No criticisms currently, although I am left to wonder why Droppy dies/'sleeps' at the end of every single comic?

I like it! No criticisms currently, although I am left to wonder why Droppy dies/'sleeps' at the end of every single comic?

Because I like having a filler for the last two frames of every comic.

Fair enough then

1. Do you understand what's going on in the comic?

lol nope
It just looks like a random string of events.

EDIT: I get it with the narration