It's a-me, Mario (Mario's Vacation) - my song made with SunVox

Could you tell me what do you think about my mario-inspired song? I haven't uploaded it on any site like NG audio portal yet so you can tell me your impression first


http://www23.zippyshare.com/v/18140749/file.html

The repetition of "It's a-me, Mario!" doesn't sound great, in my opinion. I could not get into the main part of the song because it was pretty annoying.

I think if you just had that in the beginning once then went into the song, it'd sound much better.

Main part start's on 0:15. Don't worry, "It's a-me, Mario" isn't going by whole song. Try again and you might be surprised.

Well, this song can be summarized as A Db D E, E D Db A, with a short drum loop and random Mario sound and music clips thrown in. The song structure (which is a stretch to call it that) is random and boring- none of it seems to fit together and the only interesting parts of the song are the things you didn't write.

For the part of the song you did seem to write, you need to realize that you can't just loop the same 4 bars over and over throughout the entire song. You need to write more than that and add some more layers to the thing.

Hey! I did drums and seashore sound too (I can upload sunvox project file if you don't believe me)!

The seashore sound effect broke my ears. I would get rid of it altogether.

~ Blob

Hey! I did drums and seashore sound too (I can upload sunvox project file if you don't believe me)!

I never said you didn't do those things, though the drum loop is a fraction of a bar long (which isn't a good thing), so it's not exactly noteworthy.

Also, as Blob said, the seashore sound should probably be tossed. It doesn't contribute anything positive to the song.

Reminds me of many tunes that use this type of style... I found mostly repetition and samples of Mario in there.

My impression of this song is bad. I'm no expert like Irock or KungFuFurby but I can tell the music is unpleasant and very monotonous.

Keep trying!

It was really blah, but for starters, it was alright.

Oh geez that amazingly loud sound effect at 0:30 may have severely damaged my ears. Other than that it seems very... empty, there's not really anything going on and general construction just seems very sloppy (It's the same thing repeated through the whole song with mario swim music in the middle) but I'm not really one to judge since I haven't composed any music to this date.

I didn't even know it was a seashore, i thought it was white noise.

darkhog white noise does not make music.

nor does adding copyrighted sounds and randomly mixing them together.

This is genuinely quite frightening:

Could you tell me what do you think about my mario-inspired song? I haven't uploaded it on any site like NG audio portal yet so you can tell me your impression first


http://www23.zippyshare.com/v/18140749/file.html

inspired?
more like stolen soundddssss